高考英語滿分作文及評析一

　　【全國卷I】

　　【試題回放】

　　假定你是李華，正是英國牛津參加短期語言培訓，計劃星期天去倫敦旅游?；ヂ?lián)網(wǎng)上一則廣告引起了你的注意，但一些具體信息不明確(箭頭所指內(nèi)容)。請給該旅行社發(fā)一封電子郵件，詢問有關情況。

　　注意：

　　1.詞數(shù)100左右，信的格式已為你寫好。

　　2.可根據(jù)內(nèi)容要點適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。

　　3.參考詞匯：牛津——Oxford 費用——fee

　　Dear Sir/Madame,

　　I’m writing for more information about the day tour to London.

　　As a student at Oxford University, I’d like to know if you have any special price for students. As for the money you charge, does it cover the entrance fees for visiting the places listed? What about lunch? Is it included? Or do I need to bring along my own food?

　　How long will the tour last? Since I need to prepare my lessons for the next day, I’d like to know the time to return. Besides, is there any time for shopping? I really want to have a look at the big stores in London.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　[名師點評]

　　本文是根據(jù)畫面的提示來寫一封電子郵件。作者在文章中首先把握了全部的要點，敘述較為完整;其次，作者運用一些過渡句和銜接詞將文章串聯(lián)，意思連貫。文章中采用了第一人稱和一般現(xiàn)在時，這是值得肯定的地方。

　　高考英語滿分作文及評析二

　　作文題目

　　假設你是李華，你的英國筆友Bob將于九月到你所在城市的建新華文學校學中文，來信請你在學校附近為他找一套住房。請根據(jù)圖畫提供的信息，寫信介紹住房的情況，并告知住房面積為25平方米，月租500元。

　　注意：

　　1.詞數(shù)：100左右：

　　2.參考詞匯：房租—Tent(n.).

　　I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.

　　Hope you will come here soon!

　　All the best!

　　Yours, Li Hua

　　滿分理由

　　本文格式正確，意思表述完整，行文流暢自然。作者在寫作過程中注意長短句并用，還使用了以'which，’引導的非限定性定語從句，從而使文章層次分明，富于變化，不愧為考場佳作。

　　Dear Bob,

　　Welcome to China! You wrote to me to find a place for you.

　　I have found an apartment on Fangcao Street near Jianxin Chinese School. It is on the third floor and there’re three rooms in it: a bedroom, a kitchen, and a bathroom. There is a bed, a sofa, a desk and a chair in the bedroom. The house is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan per month.

　　Also from this house you can get to your school easily. Just take the No.11 bus at the bus-stop in front of the building. It is only one stop. At last, will you please tell me the time you arrive? Then I’U be able to meet you at the airport, see you.

　　Best wishes !

　　Yours, Li Hua

　　滿分理由

　　本文格式正確，內(nèi)容完整，表述清楚，銜接緊密流暢，時態(tài)語態(tài)使用準確，特別是結尾末段適度的發(fā)揮，既充實了內(nèi)容，又符合邏輯，成為本文與眾不同的亮點。

　　Dear Bob,

　　How are you these days?

　　I’m so glad to know that you’ll come to our city to learn Chinese. You asked me to find a place for you. Now I’ve found one which I think is pretty good. The place is on Fang Cao Street which is near the No.11 bus stop. It’s just one stop away from Jianxin Chinese School.

　　There are three rooms, a kitchen, a bathroom and a bedroom. Though it is not very big, only 25 square metres, I think it is suitable. By the way, the rent is 500 yuan per month. I hope you’ll like it. If not, I’ll try to find another place for you.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　滿分理由

　　本文內(nèi)在邏輯性很強，由遠及近。由外及內(nèi)，層次分明，錯落有致。同時讓步狀語從句運用得恰到好處，很出彩，再則結構完整，從開頭的問候語到結尾都很完備。

　　Dear Bob,

　　I’m so glad that you are coming to learn Chinese here. I’ve already found you a house near our school. I’d like to tell you something about it.

　　You may get on No.ll bus at Fang Cao Street and the next stop is just Jian Xin Chinese School. The house is near the school. It is about 25 square metres. In the bedroom, there is a bed, a sofa standing against the wall and a table near the window. You may find a light on the table and a chair next to it. There are two other rooms connecting the bedroom. The left one is a bathroom and the right one is a kitchen. So you may cook by yourself. The rent for the house is 500 yuan per month. Hope you’ll enjoy staying here!

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　滿分理由

　　本文內(nèi)容具體，詳略得當，表述方式很有創(chuàng)造力和新意，長短句并用，語言結構富于變化，錯落有致，順暢圓潤，尤其是情態(tài)動詞和分詞的運用很獨到，為文章增色不少。

　　Dear Bob,

　　I’m glad to hear from you.

　　Welcome to our city in september. I’ve found a suitable house for you. The house is on Fang Cao Street, not far from the Jianxin Chinese School. If you take the No.11 bus, it is just one stop.

　　It is a flat on the third floor of a building. It has three rooms, a living-room, a bathroom and a kitchen. You can cook yourself. The mirror, the basin and the bathtub are very convenient for you. In the living-room, there is a bed, a sofa and a desk with chair. The desk is next to the window. It will be good for study. The total size is 25 square metres and the rent is 500 yuan a month.

　　Yours,

　　Li Hua

　　高考英語滿分作文及評析三

　　【北京卷】

　　【試題回放】

　　第一節(jié)情景作文(20分)

　　美國中學生jeff將要來你所在的紅星中學學習中文，經(jīng)協(xié)商安排住在你家。假設你是李華，請給Jeff寫一封信，按照下圖順序介紹他來中國后的生活安排。

　　注意：

　　1. 信的開頭已為你寫好。

　　2.詞數(shù)不少于60。

　　Dear Jeff,

　　I’m Hua from Beijing Hongxing Middle School. I’m very happy to learn that you’re going to stay with my family while you’re in Beijing.

　　While you are here, we’ll provide you with a room of your own with a bed, a desk, a couple of chairs and a TV. You’ll also have your own bathroom. Our school is quite close to our home, so we could go to school together by bike. At noon we’ll eat at the school dining hall. I’m sure you’ll like the delicious Chinese food there, and enjoy talking with friends over lunch. Classes in our school usually finish at 4 in the afternoon. You can then join other students in playing ball games or swimming. It’ll be a lot of fun.

　　If you have any questions or requests, please let me know. We’ll try our best to make your stay here in Beijing a pleasant experience.

　　Best wishes,

　　Li Hua

　　[名師點評]

　　這篇文章的特點還是比較清晰的，第一，作者根據(jù)圖畫將文章的要點概括完整，內(nèi)容充實而豐富，結構緊湊，有層次感;第二，本文沒有采用華麗的辭藻，但用詞十分恰當，段落過渡自然，令人耳目一新。